Help me with my poem please!?

I love it, its really good. If anything maybe the sentences are a little to long or short so you forget what the rhyme is? I don't know, but you could try holding out some of the shorter sentences while you say it in your head.... But all I have to say in general is that it was terrific! I have no idea why you think something is wrong with it. That's crazy, it's beautiful! No editing at ALL!